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The Dark One [chapter 1 £ naked angels]

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Story Rating   4.33  with 6 vote(s)
By HereButNeverRemembered Send DollMail
Created: 2009-10-24 16:35:51 All stories by HereButNeverRemembered
I wrote in first person last time, but from now on I will write in 3rd. It suits this story better. I am sorry for not updating sooner, but my life is HECTIC.

Jason- http://i618.photobucket.com/albums/tt267/Kienna_photos/g15.jpg

Ayden- http://i253.photobucket.com/albums/hh53/Master_O_DingleBerries/Celebs/Alex%20Pettyfer/AlexPettyfer4. jpg

One.

A pause.

Two.

Three.

Rain drops softly hit the glass window, a young teenage boy impatiently running his fingers through his dark hair. He wasn’t very happy, considering he had just caught his girlfriend of two years, Isabella, cheating on him with his best friend, Mattie. Mattie was always suspected as ga.y, but tonight, he had defiantly proved Ayden wrong.

“I’m sorry Ayden, I really didn’t mean it,” Isabella murmured; Ayden watched as her catlike hazel eyes sparkled in the darkness with earnest and honesty, and he resisted the temptation to hold her in his arms, and kiss her so gently as if she was the most delicate creature in the world. Instead, he pushed her away, running out of the apartment, and slamming his car door shut tightly.

Ayden watched her chase after him, mascara running down her cheeks, and he could tell, even from the rain, that she was crying

But he couldn’t deal with her lies anymore. So, instead, he left her standing in the rain watching as his rusty truck drove off into the distance.

He watched as lightning striked in the distance, rumbling noises of the thunder representing his anger and hatred towards the petite girl, and his best friend. Balling his fist, he slammed it against the already cracked windshield and managed to shatter it into little bits. Blood trickled down his wrist, and he winced in pain. But what he mostly felt, was numbness.

Overwhelmingly consuming numbness.

Before he could utter a sound, lights flashed before his eyes, and startled him out of his reverie. He watched, transfixed, as smoke and fire flashed before him -- all swirling up into a big ball of nothingness. And then there was a naked figure, squinting at the headlights which were disrupting it’s vision. Ayden’s eyes were glued to the males taut muscular build, hauntingly chilling brown eyes, and equally dark brown hair. He looked simply ethereal. Not of this world. And almost seemed to have a glow around him.

The man looked surprisingly calm at the situation, and slowly started walking towards Ayden’s car door. When the man reached Ayden, he wrapped his long fingers around Ayden’s wounded hand, and brought it up to his rosy lips. Ayden was going to protest, scream out for help, but he felt like he had been paralyzed and a suddenly warm and calm feeling was taking over him. When he glanced up at Ayden from the contact, Ayden could speak again.

“What…?” Ayden started to protest, but the words died on his lips. The man simply smirked, his fingers running over the smoothness of Ayden’s hand.

“Sleep,” the man, voice deep and lulling, commanded to Ayden. Ayden felt his eyes slowly closing, trying desperately to keep them open, but it was as if some unknown force was pulling him in.

And so, he slept.
  

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xxemo_katxx

16/Female
Canada
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Posted On: November 3, 2009
I love it, it's a very nice piece of art. But something IS missing, About the way most things are, you know? It's more of a feeling to me, Empty as if not enough words in the sentences.

But yes, It's beautiful the words are so descriptive. And I love how you imagine the characters to be and show them to us. Very smart and willing story, thanks for sharing it.

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DarkNet

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Australia
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Posted On: November 3, 2009
Amazing brilliant. It was missing something though, I can't quite figure it out but when I do I'll let you know, this is amazing!
horseygal771

30/Female
Sharpsburg, GA
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Posted On: October 30, 2009
i LUV it!!!!!!!!!! that was REALLY good!!!!!!!!!!! upsates still though
broken_nightma

101/Female
Braden River, FL
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Posted On: October 27, 2009
Holy crab sticks that was freaking awesome! Is it possible to be in love with a story?
hypa_happi_rea

14/Female
Antarctica
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Posted On: October 26, 2009
W-o-w. I r-e-a-l-l-y e-n-j-o-y-e-d t-h-a-t.

C-a-n-'-t w-a-i-t f-o-r s-o-m-e m-o-r-e (:

Please tell me what was wrong with that comment TDP?
LyingNaked

16/Female
Australia
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Posted On: October 24, 2009
I like it. It was good, descritive. Thanks for DMing me, and please keep me posted.
when_your_dead

14/Male
Gray, GA
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Posted On: October 24, 2009
that was a great story keep me posted hey make yourself a friend page and friend me u r a much better writer than i am check i dont wan to die on the stories homepage right under yours and comment please give me some tips?
HereButNeverRe

100/Female
New Zealand
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Posted On: October 24, 2009
I'm Sorry guys. The next chapter will be super long.

And, the pictures of those boys, are what I imagine the characters to look like. You can perceive them to be any which way you want.
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